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Want Better Results? Ask Better Questions. Here’s How

First things first: Our workshop on effective selling with Tim Paige is back on the schedule! We had to adjust the calendar, but we’ve got Tim set to teach us his low-pressure but effective techniques for sales. We’ll host the workshop (it’s free) on Tuesday, June 26 at 12:00 Noon Eastern U.S. Time. I’ve had

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How to Craft Question Headlines that Don’t Flop

During last week’s Editorial call here at Copyblogger, we had a lively discussion about ham. But that’s not the H-word I’m going to talk about today. More commonly, we analyze headlines. There’s nothing more disappointing than a unique, thoughtful, and helpful piece of content that has a headline that doesn’t do it justice. Great content

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Clickbait, Insomnia, and Writing Fears … Nevermore

You can tell we’re heading into Halloween — around the blog, our thoughts have been turning to topics dark and creepy. On Monday, Stefanie Flaxman brought up a thorny question — is it okay to use all of those fiendishly effective headline techniques, or do we run the risk of turning our content into “clickbait?”

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Clickbait or Damn Good Headline?

When I review applications from students in our Certified Content Marketer training program, I get to read some great content. And giving feedback on headlines to make them more powerful is one of my favorite parts of the process. My reason for that is simple. No one will ever know how good your content is

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5 Blissful Lessons These Nightmare Headlines Can Teach You

headline fail? tips and tools for better headlines

Let me ask you a strange question, dear web writer: do you ever lose sleep over your headlines — particularly the night before your content publishes?

I do.

At some point in the night, I’ll wake up and think:

“Oh my gosh, ‘rankle’ needs to come after ‘sunshine!'”


“Should Allen Ginsberg be in the headline? Will that turn people off?”

Here’s the funny thing: I’ve been at this for more than 15 years, and even though I’ve built up enough experience and knowledge to form a decent hunch about the effectiveness of my headlines, it’s still a guessing game.

An educated guessing game, of course. But there is a way to stack the headline odds in your favor.

How to stack the headline odds in your favor

Fortunately, we’ve got some great headline guidelines to work with. We can also look to our favorite media sites for inspiration. Here are a few of mine:

And don’t forget there are headline analysis tools available on the web that judge the emotional appeal of your headline. Here are two I’ve used:

All of these resources help us write better headlines, but how many of us go back and evaluate our headlines after they are published? Particularly the disappointing ones? What content marketing lessons could we learn?

That’s exactly what this post is all about. I did a postmortem on headlines that didn’t perform how I expected, including running them through the two headline analyzers above (which I didn’t do the first time around).

This was an interesting exercise. One I recommend you try yourself.

Some old truths were confirmed, but I also learned some new truths, too — lessons that will help you and me write better headlines … and even, possibly, sleep better at night.

Let’s take a peek.

1. Avoid words that people think are icky

Headline: The Worst Advice I’ve Ever Heard about Hustle

I was sitting on this idea about hustle for quite some time, specifically my frustrations with hearing the word every time I turned around.

And I was wondering if people were as annoyed as I was. Could I tap into that collective angst?

For those who don’t know, “I hustle” is just another way of saying, “I work hard.” Sometimes people say, “This is my side hustle,” meaning it’s work they do on the side.

But it can also mean to deceive: “I got hustled by that kindergartner.”

At the same time, I was toying around with a popular headline generator — one where you enter in three words and then it spits out a handful of ideas based upon a limited number of formulas.

After generating a number of unworkable ideas, I decided on the “worst ever” angle.

So, did it work? The answer is no, it didn’t. In terms of social shares, it’s easily my lowest-performing headline.

But how did it perform on the headline analyzers?

It didn’t even register on the Emotional Marketing Value Headline Analyzer. It gave the headline a score of 0.00 percent.

I ran it through three times because I thought there might be a mistake.

No mistake. It said:

Your headline either has no words that invoke emotional impact with people or the percentage of such words is so low as to be unlikely to make any emotional impact

Headlines with little or no emotional words rarely do as well as headlines with stronger emotional content. You can attempt to shorten your headline or use different words and analyze the new headline.

But I was confused. “Hustle” and “worst advice ever” seemed like emotional words.

Unfortunately, they don’t appear on this list of 50 trigger words.

And none of the words in the headline are on this list of the 5 most persuasive words in the English language. Perhaps I should have replaced “I” with “you?”

So, how did the headline perform on the CoSchedule Headline Analyzer? That was a different story.

I’m guessing one of the reasons it did well on the CoSchedule Headline Analyzer (68 out of 100) is because it’s short. It scored a B+ on word balance, which evaluates the percentage of words that are common, uncommon, emotional, and powerful.

The article got a lot of comments (43), so in some sense the content inspired those who took the time to read it. But I think I could have done better.

I took another crack at a headline and then tested it:

  • 6 Hard-to-Learn Lessons on the Art of the Hustle (22.22 percent and a score of 75).

The big lesson here is that the word “hustle” probably has some baggage. Most people don’t want to be considered a “hustler,” so they cut a wide path around this article.

What do you think? Do you have a better headline idea? Test it and let me know how it performs.

2. Go short

Headline: Why a Legendary Album and a Viral Hoax Should Inspire You to Create Content That’s Worth a Damn

This was one of those posts where I had a lot to say and was really excited about the concept. The problem was I had two completely different ideas running through my mind that I needed to join.

How were they going to come together?

Eventually they did, but as you can see, the headline is a masterpiece in long-windedness.

There are a few things going for this headline, though. It’s positive (“Inspire You to Create Content”) with a little spicy qualifier (“That’s Worth a Damn”).

It’s also one of those “Why” posts, which is supposed to trigger people’s curiosity. But we were simply asking readers to process too much information with “a Legendary Album and a Viral Hoax.” The headline is 19 words and 95 characters!

It scored a 56 on the CoSchedule Headline Analyzer and 22.27 percent on the Emotional Marketing Value Headline Analyzer, probably because it’s too long and too wordy.

So, what if I shortened it a bit?

  • Why a Legendary Album Should Inspire You to Create Content That’s Worth a Damn (35.71 percent and a score of 56)
  • Why a Viral Hoax Should Inspire You to Create Content That’s Worth a Damn (28.57 percent and a score of 67)

Both options are still too long.

In this case, I should have gone in a totally different direction, something like:

  • The Dos and Don’ts of Creating Powerful Viral Content (22.22 percent and a score of 68).
  • How to Become a Genius of Viral Content (37.50 percent and a score of 74).

Those two headline options are an improvement, but the big lesson here is to go short.

Do you have any ideas?

3. Polarize at your own risk

Headline: 5 Ways to Rankle an Old-School Journalist

I love this headline, personally, because I got to use the uncommon word “rankle” instead of “piss off” (which doesn’t sit well with some people). But it also has some other things going for it. It’s short and a list headline.

So, why didn’t it provoke more interaction?

Probably because Copyblogger’s audience doesn’t include a lot of journalists. If it were published on a site dedicated to journalism, perhaps it would have provoked more of a response.

I should point out that this article was published the week we closed comments on Copyblogger and there was a string of discussion on Google+.

How did it perform in the headline analyzers?

The Emotional Marketing Value Headline Analyzer didn’t like it as much as CoSchedule did:

What would I change? I would probably take a different approach.

  • 5 Reasons Journalists Do Not Need to Be Afraid of Native Advertising (50.00 percent and a score of 72)
  • 5 Reasons Journalists Do Not Need to Fear Native Advertising (50.00 percent and a score of 70)

The original headline is negative. Almost a smear, with a sensational edge to it.

The big lesson I learned from this one is that it’s an article that draws a line in the sand. People take sides. I didn’t actually want to make journalists angry, though — I just wanted the article to stand out.

What do you think?

4. Increase uncommon, power, and emotional words

Headline: Finally … Site Analytics for Plain Folks

This was an announcement for one of our master classes in Authority.

It’s a short headline and it promises to offer a solution to a common problem: we all know we need to monitor and evaluate our website analytics, but doing it well is tricky.

So, the headline offered to teach readers how. But it was a wet noodle. It scored 16.67 percent on the Emotional Marketing Value Headline Analyzer and a score of 52 on the CoSchedule Headline Analyzer.

I may have needed to change that scary phrase “site analytics” and talk about benefits. Possibly.

The CoSchedule Headline Analyzer said I should increase the uncommon, power, and emotional words — my headline wasn’t balanced. Here are two stronger possibilities:

  • What to Do If Site Analytics Scare You (37.50 percent and a score of 66)
  • 12 Things to Do If Site Analytics Scare You (33.37 percent and a score of 68)

These scored well even when I kept “site analytics” in the headline. So, the big lesson? Give the headline more personal appeal by dishing out uncommon, power, and emotional words.

Could you do better? Drop me some ideas in the comments.

5. Offer a downloadable asset for an added bonus

Headline: Against Attention: The Pre-Thanksgiving Manifesto

You should have seen me the day this published. I was stoked. I knew people were going to pound the share button for their favorite social media site with this one.

Almost a year and a half later …

I guess they couldn’t find the share button.

What would have made me happy? I don’t know, something along the lines of the 13,000+ shares I got for the 10 Rules for Writing First Drafts.

But no, this article didn’t even break 1,000 shares. Let’s see if we can figure out why.

For starters, I wrote this “manifesto” because our obsession with getting attention frustrated me.

I also had a hunch there were thousands of people out there who were also frustrated. Now, I didn’t have any particular bitterness toward a single person when I wrote this one, but I’d seen a number of successful “Against [Blank]” headlines and wanted to try one.

Besides being Seth-Godin short and tapping into what I thought was a collective nerve, the other thing I thought this headline had going for it was the word “manifesto.” People like manifestos — brief, inspiring, anthem-like commitments to make the world a better place.

Finally, I was rooting for the underdog. The little guy! I was being sentimental!

And what better day to be against attention — that thing we could never get enough of and always wanted more of and kept us cranky when we didn’t have it — than the day before Thanksgiving, the day of gratitude?

The Emotional Marketing Value Headline Analyzer gave it a 0.00 percent rating. The CoSchedule Headline Analyzer gave it a tepid 55.

The big lesson here? Perhaps shorten the headline to “Against Attention: a Manifesto.” More importantly, however, I’d offer a downloadable poster as well (which is probably one of the top reasons why “10 Rules for Writing First Drafts” was so popular).

And, of course, lower my expectations. Do you have any headline ideas for this one?

Use these 5 headline writing tips

So, let’s summarize the lessons we learned in this article.

  1. Avoid words that people think are icky (like “hustle”).
  2. Go short (19 words is entirely too long).
  3. Polarize at your own risk.
  4. Increase uncommon, power, and emotional words.
  5. Offer a downloadable asset for an added bonus.

In case you’re wondering, I did run this article’s headline through the headline analyzers. Here are the results:

So, do you have anything to add to this review? Any headline analysis tools you’d like to share? Any other lessons I should have learned? And do you lose sleep over your headlines?

Let us know in the comments!

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Copywriting: 5 proven discoveries that strengthen copy

Great copy isn’t about writing beautiful prose; it’s about knowing what to say to your prospects, when to say it and how to say it so they immediately become engaged, stay engaged and ultimately buy whatever it is you’re selling. Pretty words and design don’t matter as much as understanding what your prospects are thinking, what they expect during each stage of the buying process and then giving that to them.

That’s why MarketingExperiments has dozens of clinics focused on helping you write subject lines, headlines, body copy and more to help you achieve that. We call it “aligning copy with customer thought sequences.”

Get a condensed version of this information in the latest MarketingExperiments Web clinic. In about 20 minutes it distills more than 15 years of testing and research into five discoveries that can immediately help you write copy that sells. Watch it here.


Discovery #1: You have only seven seconds to arrest the attention of your prospect

That’s being generous. It’s critical to lead any copy with what the customer will value most about your product and nothing else. Show customers what’s in it for them immediately.

Version A leads with value: “Australia’s Most Trusted & Accredited Business Hosting Company.”


Version B doesn’t — it provides an explanation, but no value: “Business Dedicated Servers Australia.”


The Result: Version A achieved 188% more conversions.


Discovery #2: Never present the solution before building the problem

Never assume prospects know that they need what you’re selling; if they don’t know they have a reason to buy, they’re not going to.

Consider a company that sells a do-it-yourself solution. Unless you’re are a hardcore hobbyist, chances are you’re not going to know whether you need it. However, the Control in this test assumed you already know precisely what was wrong, and would be delighted that this product can rapidly and easily repair the problem. In contrast, the Treatment began with helping you diagnose whether you have the issue that the product resolves.

The Result: The Treatment achieved 36% more sales.


Discovery #3: Clarity trumps persuasion

Clearly communicate what’s valuable about your product upfront. If your prospect values it too, that will be more than enough to engage them. Only allow creativity to add to that value, and never allow it to detract. You may not win writing awards, but you’ll get far more sales being boring and clear than creative and confusing.

Consider this travel insurance provider. It started out with this vague, but clever, headline:

It switched to a headline that outlines value to the customer — peace of mind and the credibility of being in business for 35 years.

The Result: The Treatment achieved a 330% increase in conversions. Though other elements of the page were also changed in the Treatment, the clearer headline drove prospects further down the page and contributed to the lift in conversion.


Discover #4: Be ruthlessly unsentimental with your copy

To paraphrase Einstein: “If you can’t explain something simply, you don’t know it well enough.”  Be sparse with words and, if you can’t, maybe you don’t know your product’s value well enough.

Generally, long copy creates friction, keeping people from moving forward in the sales cycle. However, in some cases where a product requires high commitment at a high cost, more copy has produced better results.

You just need enough copy to communicate the value of the product. Delete the rest. 


Discovery #5: Asks must align with expectations

If someone asked you to go on a first date and marry them in the same breath, you might think they were a little presumptuous at best. Yet, too many marketers do something similar in their campaigns. When they should be asking someone to “click here to find out more” they’re asking them to “buy now.” Or some iteration of that.

Consider this email that asks recipients to “Get Started Now.” That’s a pretty big commitment for someone to make based on an email.


This call-to-action was changed to “Estimate My Monthly Payment” which requires far less of commitment from the recipient.


The Result: Seven percent more people clicked through to get that estimate and 125% more people bought the product.


Use this information to immediately start increasing clickthrough and conversion by putting your copy to the test. Ask yourself:

  • Does my copy immediately arrest the attention of the prospect?
  • Am I sufficiently building the problem before presenting the solution?
  • Does my copy clearly express the value of my offer?
  • Am I using the proper amount of copy relative to the magnitude of my ask?
  • Does my call-to-action align with the expectations of my prospect?


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